Writing Log Blog Due Friday March 10th

3/6/2017

This week's assignment is a writing blog! Please choose a link below to finish one of the stories (like we've done in class).
LINK 1: http://www.goodnightstories.com/finish.htm
LINK 2: http://www.stuartstories.com/activities/finishme.html
Here are the requirements:
1.) Write at least three paragraphs continuing the story
2.) Use at least one form of figurative language (similes, metaphors, personification, alliteration, etc.)
3.) Use dialogue (quotation marks)
4.) Use at least one example of "Show, Not Tell" (For example: Instead of 'nervous', you can say, "Her heart fluttered like a butterfly as she peered at the audience from backstage, 'I hope I don't mess up,' she quietly whispered to herself.").
5.) Include the title of the story you choose
Enjoy this assignment and have fun! I can't wait to read your creative stories!

Reese (also the first one to post)

3/6/2017 03:47:52 pm

The strange dream
It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.
It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.
Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.
Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden she tripped and fell over right over her new shoes! She was bleeding everywhere. Her knees and her left cheek were covered in blood. What is Molly going to do? She stood up and looked down to see what happened to her shoes. They were covered in dirt and blood. Their shiny look was gone. They were ripped up so that the cold air would reach her feet again. A waterfall was pouring from her eyes. It was because of the pain but also because of the shoes. She just found them and now they are permanently damaged. She sat down and as fast as a running cheetah took of her shoes and threw them into the bushes. Her brother snuck away in laughter.
She ran from the bushes in bare feet while blood was dripping down her body. She needed help, fast.
“HELLO!” Molly screamed at the top of her lungs. “IS ANYBODY HERE!”
There was no answer. She ran across the park. Suddenly she remembered about her brother. Where was he? She looked around. He wasn’t there. She started running toward the boots. When she got there she found her brother lying behind fence. Completely still. Molly sprinted as fast as her legs would let her and leaped over the fence. He wasn’t breathing.
Molly gasped. It was a dream. For once she was glad to wake up. She threw her head toward her brother’s bed. He was sound asleep.
“PP HH EEEEWWWW!” she whispered to herself. She was happy that her brother was okay.

Anna

3/6/2017 05:55:13 pm

A Strange Dream

It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.
It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.
Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.
Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden…
She looked down at her boots. “Something feels weird on the bottom,” she said to herself. She saw that her boots had a hole in them. She started sobbing. She felt as sad as a bored blobfish.
“Um, hello?” “This is a park where you have fun and play not sit there and sob.” said her brother looking annoyed.
“Well, my boots have a hole in them...I don’t know what to do….These are my brand new boots from over-”
“Bla bla bla bla bla bla” her brother interrupted. “We have duct tape at home. Just cover up that whole and, boom they’ll be fixed.”
So together they skipped along with Molly still showing a little frown on her face.
A little later, they arrived home and put duct tape on the boot.
“Thanks,” said molly happy that her brother had saved the day….
Suddenly she woke up and realized that what had happened was just a dream. She was glad everybody turned out ok and even the boots!

Ava

3/7/2017 05:21:29 pm

I did that too!

KINGSLEY THE GREAT

3/9/2017 08:18:19 pm

wow, I loved your story and thought you added lots of detail, but I was confused when you said that Molly's brother ran away in laughter, because after that he died and that is not funny!

Ava

3/6/2017 05:12:30 pm

The Strange Dream
It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.
It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.
Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.
Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden…
She slipped in a huge thing of mud she messed up her clothes, her brother started turning into a monster that was tall, big, sharp, and green. He was getting bigger and bigger every minute. The green park was turning in sloop park, and a grose park. So when Molly looked at herself she was turning into a troll. Molly woke up with terrier and she scream out loud everyone rush up and the mom asked “ Is my Molly okay?” Molly responded with a yes and she told her parents what a strange dream she had with a smile and she was happy it was not a true thing, she was happy she was safe with her family, and she felt better that her parents.
Finished by Ava Ross

Ava

3/6/2017 05:14:56 pm

I forgot a word that she felt better that her parents came.

Molly Dorighi

3/6/2017 07:52:35 pm

Lost in The Wild, Wild West

It was the summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the wild, wild west.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his ranch in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room listening to the crickets, owls, and coyotes. Very early in the morning, uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my ranch" he said. After breakfast, I went to help aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze. I was impressed to see my dad and uncle Paul riding horses, they looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. "Don't be late for supper" uncle Paul cried "and keep to the trail so that you don't get lost". "OK" my dad cried back. After a while we could hardly see uncle Paul and his farm house. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun blended to create a majestic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
Suddenly a little coyote jumped out in front of my horse and startled him. He was so startled, he took off running faster than I imagined he could. I was holding on as hard as I could and my dad was trying to keep up with me. My horse got off the trail and kept running, and only stopped once it reached the river. It seems the water must have calmed him down a bit. It was a beautiful spot and as frightened as I was just a few minutes earlier, I was happy that I got a chance to see such a place.
My dad thought it was gorgeous too, but he said that we had to leave because the sun was setting and he did not want us to get lost. We had left the trail and we did not have a compass. The last thing we wanted was to try to find our way home in the dark. We turned around to start back but the trail was nowhere in sight. The frightened horse had run so fast and so far that we had no idea where we were. By now the sun had almost dipped behind the horizon and we had to think fast, so we tried to find our footprints in the dusty sand. But as we looked we got even more lost and then it grew dark. My dad had a great idea to follow the stars back to the ranch. I remembered that the big dipper was right above my uncle's ranch.
We made sure that our horses were calm before we set off on the long journey home. With doubtful thoughts going through my head, I hoped that we wouldn’t see hungry coyotes. We headed toward a high rock to see where the big dipper was in the sky. “I see it Dad, I see it,” I said excitedly. My horse gave a little snort and as we set off to find our way back home.
We galloped along the dirt. “Honey, stop,” my dad said with a shaky voice. I stopped with astonishment because I have never seen my dad so frightened in my entire life. “I think that's another coyote. It's about dinner time for them. “GO. RUN,” my dad shouted! We galloped like the wind.
At last we were at the ranch. I hugged my uncle as tight as a mama bear hugging her cubs. I snuggled their dog Baxter and kissed my dad good night. As I got into my pajamas, I was relieved to be safe in my bed. I yawned as my eyes slowly closed and I drifted off to sleep.

Anna

3/8/2017 05:21:56 pm

For Molly and wills 😂 great response🌹

Wills

3/7/2017 04:13:37 pm

Lost in the Wild, Wild West

It was the summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the wild, wild west.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad's friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his ranch in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room listening to the crickets, owls, and coyotes. Very early in the morning, uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn on my ranch" he said. After breakfast, I went to help aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze. I was impressed to see my dad and uncle Paul riding horses, they looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn't going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. "Don't be late for supper" uncle Paul cried "and keep to the trail so that you don't get lost". "OK" my dad cried back. After a while we could hardly see uncle Paul and his farm house. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun blended to create a majestic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
Suddenly a little coyote jumped out in front of my horse and startled him. He was so startled, he took off running faster than I imagined he could. I was holding on as hard as I could and my dad was trying to keep up with me. My horse got off the trail and kept running, and only stopped once it reached the river. It seems the water must have calmed him down a bit. It was a beautiful spot and as frightened as I was just a few minutes earlier, I was happy that I got a chance to see such a place.
My dad thought it was gorgeous too, but he said that we had to leave because the sun was setting and he did not want us to get lost. We had left the trail and we did not have a compass. The last thing we wanted was to try to find our way home in the dark. We turned around to start back but the trail was nowhere in sight. The frightened horse had run so fast and so far that we had no idea where we were. By now the sun had almost dipped behind the horizon and we had to think fast, so we…
So we looked around in all directions to see if anything looked familiar. Nothing did. After, we had searched the sun had gone down the orange mountains and it suddenly became very dark. “We can’t try to find our way back in the dark. We must find a place to sleep and we will find the path in the morning.” said my dad. We broke camp and tied our horses to the nearby trees. We slept under a big tree but I couldn’t sleep.
We were awoken by the gleaming sun rising in the sky. After we had gotten up we started looking again. Once again however we didn’t find anything at all. I lost hope and decided to slouch under a tree. This is pointless! We’ll never make it back! I thought. Half an hour later I was startled by the voice of my dad. “I found the trail!” he said to me with a grin on his face. I jumped up and down. We would make it back!
We started down the trail back to the house. I was a little bit embarrassed. I had just slouched under and a tree and my dad didn’t give up and he found the trail. We walked in silence to the house until I broke the silence. “I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have given up.” I confessed.
“It’s okay. He said. You were just mad.” he reassured me. We continued to walk home until we heard voices calling out our names.We made our horses run until we reached Uncle Paul and his family. They told us how worried they were and then we told them about the story. They were all so shocked. When we got home we had a great dinner and had the best time so far on our trip!

Sophie

3/8/2017 06:13:59 am

a strange dream
It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.

It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.

Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.

Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden...

Molly started to get taller and taller til' she was the size of a tree.She was up so high her brother said " you look like a giant!" she started to wobble and she fell! But as she was falling her brother ran over and screeched " I got you sis!".
They thought he was to late to catch her but actually she was hanging upsidown and she figured it was just something she ate. A little later after she finally figured out how to get down and just as Molly said "Maybe we could run bare foot in that field." She shot up this time she didn't stop at a specific place in the sky. This time she was as tall as a skyscraper. Steve started to climb the tallest trees in the feild.
Now she started to slip out of her new boots. She was falling into the tree beside the one Steve was in. He started to take the biggest steps he could. He got to the exact spot she was about to land in. he caught her in the nick of time and safely put her on the ground. But just as he did that her family woke her up with a worried look on their faces. they told her she was screaming in her sleep so them she had to tell them her dream all the way from the start.

sophia g

3/9/2017 04:48:10 pm

It all started on a nice sunny day last April. All the kids in school were excited to be going to the zoo, but I was especially excited. I love animals and picnics, and going to the zoo is having both at the same time.
At the zoo, we got to see different animals in their cages and some of them were getting fed by their guards. Each of us had a favorite animal, and mine was the Elephant.
It was all going well, until Sam decided to mess around with the lock on the monkey's' cage and then…

Sam accidentally unlocked the cage and the monkeys came running out of the cage. You should have seen the looks on their faces, they were so happy to be out of their cages. But when Sam was celebrating because it was so funny, he turned around and the guards faces did not look so happy. One of the really tall guards said that Sam was going to be sent home in one hour.

After Sam heard this news he was so mad that he chucked a rock at the reptile’s cage and it shattered the glass and all of the reptiles and snakes came running out. The snakes and reptiles ruined all of the punknecks. When he looked at the guards one of them did not look so happy. Then Sam looked at a guard with a snake slithering up the guards pants. OWW!!!! That came from the guard with the snake slithering up his pants. After that, one of the guard yelled” NOW YOU HAVE REALLY DONE IT THIS TIME LITTLE MAN!!!’’.

Now Sam really wanted to mess with the guards so when they were pulling him to the teacher, Sam grabbed some polar bear food and stuffed it into his pocket. When Sam was running the polar bears ran into the glass and smashed it until they were free. Some of the guards did not notice the polar bears. Then, Sam moved out of the way and the guards got smashed!!
“That shows you to mess with me’’ Sam mumbled.

Boom bennett boom

3/9/2017 06:01:49 pm

Mrs. Duck counted her little ducklings again. They were still nine. She couldn't believe her eyes. All ten ducklings were there a few minutes ago, as she counted them before they swam across the river. She made sure she was right behind her ducklings as they swam across and she only looked away once as she heard a big splash behind her. She looked back to see what it was and when she saw that it was a couple of boys splashing rocks in the water, she continued to swim keeping a keen eye on her little ones.

But now, one was missing. It was the youngest of her ducklings and she was so worried. What could have happened to him. She looked up and down the river but she could see him nowhere.

At that very moment the little duckling realized that he was lost. He couldn't understand how this had happened since he had only gotten distracted for what seemed like a moment. He had run into some playful fish and followed them for just a moment. Now he could not see his mother or the other ducklings. It seems that the current had carried him far downstream and now as the little duckling climbed up on the river bank, he needed to find a way back to his family. So he put out a cry. The little duck quacking loudly, Mrs. Duck found him and and all was well. But then, the little duck was swept away.

To have Mrs Duck save him, read the next paragraph.
To let her stay there, skip the next paragraph.

Mrs. Duck flies over to the ducklet. She cradles him and is suddenly hit by a log. Mrs. Duck is knocked out. She and the little duck drown. THE END

Mrs. Duck watches as the little ducklet climbs onto a log. The ducklet rides the log back and jumps down and swims to shore. THE END

chrissy

3/10/2017 05:36:28 am

I like the second ending. Not only does the duck figure out how to save himself but no one dies. I like the choose your own adventure part!

Sean is awesome

3/9/2017 06:32:31 pm

It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.

It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.

Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.

Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden... An evil witch appeared out of a bush. Molly saw the witch and ran away like a jet. She and Steve were running towards home. As they were running the witch was flying on her magical broom. She stopped right in front of Steve and Molly and they stopped.The evil witch said "Hand me those boots little girl" As the witch had said this Molly was thinking of an idea, 'what if I pour my water on the witch, if worked in the movies it'l probably work in real life.' As the witch was reaching for the boots Molly pulled out an nerf water gun at the last second and blasted her, as Molly predicted the witch screamed and started to get smaller and smaller until you couldn't see her any more. Once they saw this happen they waited to see if she disappeared,when they were sure of it Molly and Steve jumped in the air... As this happened Molly jumped out of the bed and woke up. 'WOA' thought Molly. 'that was a crazy dream.' It took her a second to fall back asleep but she finally did.

Kingsley Is os awesome! link

3/9/2017 08:13:07 pm

An old man with a cane and false teeth walked up to her and said, "where are you going with my good luck shoes? They are so precious to me!"
"well sir, they don't look like they would fit you, they are my size!" Molly said looking at her feet. Her brother started running," well, it is not based on if they fit me it is based on how long I have had them and how I feel about them. And I feel like I am not ready to give them away! GIVE THEM BACK!" Molly handed the strange man the shoes and asked him, "where do you live sir?"
"In Kansas,but I am here to see my grand daughter Holly, and to be honest I don't even remember her name so I thought that she would forgive me for you know,not knowing her name by giving her these boots, now scram!"
"well sir, they are very nice boots and Holly or whatever her name is, is a lucky girl and I'm sure she deserved those boots!" Molly ran away to find her brother and the old man got in the car. Suddenly Molly's brother stopped when he heard an old man screaming in his car about how he doesn't know how to get to 11753 east bangle road. "hey, I think that's my address, but I don't know for sure." The old man pulled over and tapped him on the shoulder, "hello there young man, can you help me get to this house?" he pointed to his phone. 'Hey that's my house," said Molly's brother. "really, do you know how to get there from her?"
"well sure I do!" he said proudly because he thought he knew his way around. "Wait, peter, are you Holly's brother?"
Who's Holly? I only have a sister named Molly!"
"PETER PETER, WAIT, I CAN'T KEPP UP! WAIT" Molly said. She came to a stop and looked up at the man, "hey, what were you talking to my brother about?"
"Molly, is it really you?"
"Yes, grandpa Stand, is it really you? He gave her the shoes and they hopped in the car to home! THE END!

allison

3/11/2017 09:02:58 pm

Lost in the Wild, Wild West

So we... hopped on the horse right away and started looking all around for the path that will lead us back to Uncle Paul's house. We looked for so long that it felt like it was getting darker and darker before I could even blink.
We looked so hard and so long in till finally my dad said "lets take a brake, it is getting dark out." I listened to what he said and sat down on a log.
Unlike my dad I was so worried. "What will we do? Will we ever get back to Uncle Paul's house?" My dad could tell that I was worried but still didn't say anything
My eyes started to close and I was just about to fall asleep in till out of no where I hear "AWOOOOOOO!" I jult up and start looking all around to see what that sound was. My eyes stopped when I came across the last thing I would ever want to see, it was what got us into this mess, it was a... coyote!
"Dad, dad!" I said well quickly running over to him. He jumped up just like I did and I didn't even have to explain anything because he saw it right away. He did not say anything for a little because I guess was still trying to track of all that is happening. Finally after a few seconds he said calmly again "Ok, just walk away silently with the horse and I will be there in a second." I follow his directions and walk in the opposite direction of the coyote with the horse.
Only after just a couple of seconds i hear a loud "BANG! BOOM!" My head flicks towards that direction.
A couple of tree branches were blocking my view so I couldn't see what was going on. "Was that my dad or the coyote? Is he ok?" I wondered nervously again. I look down at my hands which are shaking like a level ten earthquake!
All of a sudden out of the corner of my eye I see the fire go out. I don't move trying to be as quite as I can in case the coyote came. The bush moves. I jult my head in that direction. "Who is that?" I think my heart beating as quick as lightning. My dad hops out of the bush, "Few." I think to myself.
My dad and I start walking a little to see if we can find a log to sit on, finally we come across a small log and sit. It was quite for we were still shocked about what had just happened.
"Dad, look!" I say braking the silence. Once again I don't need to explain anything because we both were looking a the same thing... the trail that led back home!
My dad jumped up. "Well, lets start heading home, I know it is late but it is only like a 10 minute ride and a bed is better than the dirt." I jump up to agreeing with him. "I would rather sleep in a bed than the ground." I thought relieved that we were finally heading home.
The ride so far is quite in till I said about half way through "Wow, quit the adventure we had today." Me and my dad both laughed and then he said "Yes it was, probably one of the best." I smile then close my eyes and finally drift off to sleep.

THE END!!!

Bennett

3/16/2017 05:44:46 pm

A Strange Dream

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It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers.

It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep.

Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone.

Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden a cheetah in Kevlar burst out of a brush and attacked a snake. The cheetah folded into a hat and Molly was dazed. Then the boots laid out two halves of a jetpack. Molly put them on her back. They fused together and Molly soared into the sky.

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